“Voice”

There are so many types of voices and I feel like when authors describe a voice, they don’t do it well. What annoys me is when people start describing a voice but then stop so you’re left with like half a description and I start screaming WHYYYYY!!!!

When describing voice, I think it’s best to start with the overall – something like the pitch (usually in romance novels the hero has a baritone – because apparantly tenors aren’t worthy). Describe how the voice makes he/she feel. Then when that is established, the voice can really be versatile for example: his usually sweet voice became dead – completely devoid of emotion. (Really terrible example but you get the gist). This, I find, will also make the characters emotions and reactions more real.

Here are some things to help you get thinking 🙂

Appealing – pleasant to hear

Aggressive – intense or harsh

Bellowing – to yell in a deep voice

Breathy – said breathlessly

Bright – happy or cheerful

Brittle – as though about to cry

Clear – distinct, easily perceptible

Coarse – vulgar or indecent Continue reading

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“Fair”

Just the last few days I’ve been doing a heap of writing but I am one of those people who hate repetitive phrases and reading over my stuff I noticed I’ve been doing it with ‘fair’ – as in ‘it’s not fair’.

I know there are several meanings to the word: pale, reasonable, good, adequate, pleasing. But the synonyms for reasonable, to me, are quite pompous and I don’t want to include some in that context because I don’t want it to appear that I’m trying too hard and also because it doesn’t suit the way my character thinks. Basically my character has just had a miscarriage and everything to her isn’t fair. I noticed it was coming up more and more but none of the synonyms are working. Doesn’t it seem quite pompous to say: ‘it wasn’t impartial.’? And that’s my biggest problem! All of these synonyms aren’t as simple as ‘fair’!

Today I scouted the web – desperately trying to find ones that will help me! And these are what I’ve come up with:

Right.

Good.

See there aren’t many. Otherwise I’d have to stick to words like: Unprejudiced, honourable, unbiased. Maybe this is just one of those words that people won’t think is a repetitive phrase. Maybe it’s fine to use fair in that context but just try to allude to the word by showing how your character feels and why it isn’t fair before saying it isn’t, that way it doesn’t become a broken record. That’s all the advice I have to offer.

 

 

“Suddenly”

I’ve done this post because, not only my friend but, plenty of writers try to use “suddenly” to emphasize how fast something happens and I find that it’s not done as effectively. In some cases, writers just get lazy and don’t describe the situation and replace ALL that description with “suddenly”. Or like in my friend’s case, she just wants to show how quickly it happens – even when she’s already described it. Because it is an adverb I find it to weaken description like they can weaken sentences, (for those who don’t know: Adverbs are adding the ‘ly’ to ‘sudden’), and I try to avoid them like the plague because it can also give you more of a challenge; finding how to write sentences without those in there.

With the “suddenly”, you’ll notice this a lot in novels, and by the time you reach the end of it and get through all the “suddenly’s”  you’ll be feeling like me; whenever there are too many repeated words my mind makes them sound like “Yesterday” and the way it’s sung in the Beetles song. Deadpan and sombre.

I just find “suddenly” is used so often that it’s lost its meaning because everyone uses suddenly when they shouldn’t or, if they’re well-known, they’ll do it just because they can. After looking through some of the synonyms, I’ve found that they aren’t as… irritating; and if you avoid using them as an adverb then it will have a better effect with your writing.

Abrupt

All at once

Direct

Fast

Haste

Immediate

Instant

Instantaneous

Pronto

Quick

Rapid

Rash

Snappy

Speedy

Straightaway

Swift

Unanticipated

Unexpected

Unforseen

Unintended

Unplanned